WTAFiction

I've had the awesome luck this week to work with three wonderful critique partners also participating in the Writer in Motion projec t.   Their feedback was phenomenal, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading their drafts and providing critique there, too.  With their help, I have revised the story again (the second draft resembled the first so much I neglected to post it, sorry).  This is what went out to the editor who is going to provide her own critique next week. I'm enjoying this process! Here's the 3rd draft, for those who are curious. "Against Humanity" by Linda Scott “We have to talk,” Chelion said in its most take-me-seriously voice.   I glanced up from my pinball game and did a double take.    I managed not to tilt the machine, but I lost my ball.    “Not while you look like  that .”    I shuddered.   “Like what?”   “Like fifty farts in a trenchcoat.”    I pulled back the plunger and released the ball.    Maybe if I annoyed it enough, I could keep playing.   T